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The Final Return

About Bishakha Moitra

An amateur artist, I am a fulltime mother of a six year old. I also have 10 years of sales and marketing experience. Painting and writing are my passion. Writing to me is expressing my emotions, thoughts, opinions and views and presenting it in a way that others can feel the connect. My preferred language for writing is hindi and english. I use “a gypsy soul” as pen name for writing as I believe it describes what I truly am.

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He was a restless soul, never at peace. He had this zeal in him, a passion to do something which will make his life worthwhile. He used to travel a lot outside his motherland for business. Though he liked what he was doing but he was not truly happy. He wanted to settle down in his hometown. His soul yearned to return to his land, his birthplace.
One day he reads a clip stating there is vacancy in an organization which has the most exciting workplace like no where else. He applies and is asked to join them. He is happy, finally he gets a chance to live a life of less ordinary.
He gets posted in a place where he is very close to mother earth. He has to live in a deserted area under the ground. The houses given to the employees in this organization are called bunkers. The neighbors are not so friendly though and disputes break out on and off. He is having a time of his life.
Though he loves his workplace and job profile but still something is amiss. Somewhere in his heart, he always has this urge to return. Returning back to his roots. A longing which has always been there. But he knows its not possible for him to return unless he has performed his duties and met his responsibilities towards the organization.
Days passed, he is happy but not at peace. One day the small disputes with the neighbors takes a bad shape and turns into a major quarrel. The organization decides they have to teach the neighbors a lesson and end the dispute once and for all. He is promoted and made the head of the team there to execute the operation in the ground level. The moment he comes to know about this turn of affairs, he feels excited. He decides, this is the moment he has been waiting for. He would fulfil this one final responsibility so that the organization is secure and safe and then finally, he can return back to his home. He dreams of the day when he would reach his town and would be greeted by his family and friends. He is sure to receive a warm welcome.
In his leadership the team starts gaining a stronghold over the neighbors and sooner than later the quarrel is settled harshly but firmly. The organization wins but they are really sad to loose one of their most beloved employee.

The train is about to reach the station. He can’t wait to get down. He is anxious and eager. There is a huge gathering of people to receive him at the station. He is overwhelmed. He gets down at the station in a coffin, wrapped in tri-color and is then laid at rest. United with his land now, he is at peace. He has completed his destiny and finally returned, forever.

 

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  • Aparna Mondal23/01/2019 at 5:10 PM

    A beautifully written touching story! The love of a devoted person for his motherland is so beautifully expressed. It’s a tribute to the sacrifice of the soldier who gave away his life for defending our country. Keep penning many more stories. Loved reading this.

    • Bishakha Moitra23/01/2019 at 9:38 PM

      Thank u so much for your kind words and appreciation. Coming from you matters much. Thanks for encouraging me always. ❤️❤️

  • Swetha Amit23/01/2019 at 7:58 PM

    Such an emotional and touching story. Tugs the strings of the heart. It’s a beautiful tribute to our soldiers and armed forces to whom we are forever indebted to.

    • Bishakha Moitra23/01/2019 at 9:40 PM

      Thank u so much Nidhi. I am glad u liked it. Yes indeed we are forever indebted to the soldiers.

    • Bishakha Moitra23/01/2019 at 9:41 PM

      Sorry for the mistake thank you so much Swetha Amit.

  • Nidhi Jangid23/01/2019 at 8:04 PM

    The writer has depicted the longing of the protagonist for returning to hometown and at the same time, being dedicated and loyal to the duty ! It’s a matter of fortune for those who never goes away from their motherland. The end is quite tragic yet gives a sense of proud!

    • Bishakha Moitra23/01/2019 at 9:43 PM

      Thank you Nidhi for summarising it so beautifully. Glad u liked it.

  • Advait Berde23/01/2019 at 8:10 PM

    I could never have guessed this was about an Indian soldier. The fluidity and simplicity of the write up is so gripping I was actually taken aback by the ending. Great job!

    • Bishakha Moitra23/01/2019 at 9:47 PM

      I am glad u liked it. Your feedback means a lot. I hoped the readers to have the surprise element. Thanks for confirming it.

  • Preesha Reddy23/01/2019 at 8:50 PM

    It was beautiful story. In the end it was hard to believe that the fates cut his string of life. Would love to read more stories like these. Keep writing 💗.

    • Bishakha Moitra24/01/2019 at 4:27 PM

      Thank you so much Preesha. Hopefully you are gonna read more from me soon. Keep reading and keep liking 😊😊

  • MohdShariq23/01/2019 at 11:08 PM

    Excellent story bishakha. You have penned deep emotions which touched my heart. While reading I was visualising the story and Got me emotional at end. Superb. And keep it up. God Bless.
    Shariq

    • Bishakha Moitra24/01/2019 at 4:30 PM

      Thank you Shariq. I am glad you liked the story and could emotionally connect with it.

  • Insha Faridoon24/01/2019 at 12:05 PM

    I have to be honest and say that this story gave me goosebumps. I admire how the story has depicted the life of a soldier and has explained the working of the army, without actually using those words in the story. The writing style is beautiful and adds to the essence of the story.

    • Bishakha Moitra24/01/2019 at 4:45 PM

      Thank you so much Insha Faridoon for such kind words and appreciating the story.

  • Kheya Baidya27/01/2019 at 11:37 AM

    The story is beautiful in it’s rendition of events, life and emotions. The life of soldiers is extremely challenging and their willingness to take up the challenges for the motherland not only fills us with pride but bouts of nationalism..some inspire by preaching, and some by doing. Liked the story…waiting for more

    • Bishakha Moitra30/01/2019 at 1:47 PM

      Thank you so much for your appreciation. I am glad you liked it.

  • NANDANA DASGUPTA29/01/2019 at 12:31 PM

    How wonderfully have you penned down the entire journey of a Soldier in such a small scape. Though being a short story it is filled with such passions & emotions. Truly you’ve managed to stir among your readers every essence of being proud for such people who give up their lives without any second thoughts. Best wishes for you & keep up with this wonderful work.

    • Bishakha Moitra30/01/2019 at 1:49 PM

      Thank you so much Nandana for such kind words. It feels good to get such wonderful feedback.

  • Boijayanto Mukherjee01/02/2019 at 1:17 AM

    A highly metaphoric perspective of a life of a soldier. The unquenchable thirst, the unyielding confidence and the harsh end to the life of an adventurer- all relate inexplicably to every patriot looking towards to a life of fulfillment. The third person narrative and the concise treatment of an otherwise largely circulated tale is the main thing that appeals. A great attempt at trying something different.

    • Bishakha Moitra05/02/2019 at 9:07 AM

      Thank you so much for your kind words and aporeciation. I am glad you liked it.

  • Purnesh Bhattacharya15/07/2019 at 5:57 PM

    Dear Bishakha,

    In most of the short stories, the end comes very suddenly and unannounced. In this story too, there had to be an end. But it was not a rushed one. It paced like the rising intoxication levels of a potion, which seems absolutely ineffective in the beginning. And then it catches hold of that one nerve, which has been responding somewhat differently from others and very differently than others. This story of yours had that effect on me. It caught hold of the nerve, which belongs to this storyteller. Trust me as a storyteller, I couldn’t see the end coming. But when it did come, I had a tinge of moistness, which had suddenly accumulated at the corner of my right eyes. Thereafter, I realized, emotions had turned a bit heavier. To conclude, a simple, touching, emotional story. Lovely reading it.

    Regards,
    Purnesh Bhattacharya

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